Tuesday, July 26, 2011

Poetry Critique

24 comments:

  1. Colorful
    Dancing
    Chaotic
    Blur
    Person
    Amazement
    Lively
    Motion
    Light
    Happiness
    Movement
    Squiggly
    Rainbow
    Magic
    Bright
    Fun
    Dynamic
    Glow
    Power
    Burst

    The colorful dancing blur glowed with lively power
    Watching with amazement the person saw the happy movement
    The squiggly chaos light the room
    Dynamic Rainbow fun bursted with a bright magical motion

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  2. Kristin Vineyard, Balcony

    The mysterious emptiness looks dangerously safe
    As the spy knows the secrets of its sterile economy
    While lonely neighbors wait behind windows on the surreal corner
    Watching for visitors from last night in the shadows, not home, transient.

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  3. A poem about Lauryn's Light Graffiti:

    The colorful movement of light reflects that of a rainbow
    The mixture of lines and unpredictable layers forms a wall of light
    Neon stripes of color blend creating overlapping spirals
    The chaotic transparent rectangle swirls in a pool of color

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  4. Spun, symmetrical, spherical balance
    Luminous, circular, controlled rim
    And a bursting bright blue explosive center
    Lighted, round, illuminated
    Glowing and floating in the mysterious dark

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  5. @ Xan's Light Graffiti

    In the dark night sky a soft, luminous, round unknown saucer-like object hovers energetically across the sky like a shooting star.

    The otherworldly object was a bright, glowing orb that spun very fast with smooth movements.

    The radiant orb sped off quickly in a confusing and bewildering way.

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  6. The rainbow wave moved side-to-side
    As the noisy swoosh transported fairy lights to the stars.
    The time travel warped the snake bright lines into consuming chaos.
    Where crazy sound entered a balanced funnel of light created by a prism of dust.

    For Lauryn Light Graffiti

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  7. 1. Trapped
    2. Laser
    3. Heat
    4. Glow
    5. Darkness
    6. Figure
    7. Lava
    8. Cornered
    9. Box
    10. Container
    11. Peering
    12. Flaming
    13. Celestial
    14. Questioning
    15. Alien
    16. Crimson
    17. Shower
    18. Energy
    19. Curious
    20. Playful

    The trapped heat of the laser figure burned with energy,
    The celestial being glowed crimson in the darkness,
    Playfully questioning the container from which he peered,
    The box became a flaming shower of lava,
    Cornering the curious alien form in the lack of light.

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  8. The viewpoint of a drunken pedestrian
    Walking in one direction
    Flash red, yellow, green
    Turn left, don't fall on the concrete
    Walk a straight line on I-35
    Follow the flashing curvy street lights in a line
    Flash red, yellow, green
    In the night sky

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  9. Stretched, hand, long, bony, pincer,gross, unnatural, night creep, red, ouch, blinding, forked, demon, grotesque, pulled, fright, flared, monster, evil, scary

    The long and scary hand, unnaturally boned, pincered like a monstrous
    night creep.
    Forked, red and gross
    The creature stretched ouchingly and the demon flared up with evil
    blinding fright.

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  10. The crammed boat was overflowing with different courageous followers.
    Their steadfast loyalty unified their team as they bravely listened to their confident leader.
    While they may have been unsure, worried, or stunned by possible danger, their boat carried them onward with purpose.
    Contained in this small vessel, they paddled vigorously, determined and headstrong into the unknown...where no man's gone before.

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  11. @Rachel Collins' light graffiti

    Outlined purposefully in fuchsia luminosity, was a bulky figure that appeared to be inhuman.
    Silent and deadly, the space-like figure seemed to be following something through the shadows.
    It contrasted the obscure night futuristicaly and it’s two headed nature was unnerving.
    The creepiness doubled when it cautiously came forward through the eerie night.

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  12. Cala's Box:

    In the dark, scary, and chaotic jungle rests a mysteriously posed monstrous head.
    Fire is scattered around fluidly in the old whimsical jungle where the fear of death rests shockingly in the woman's eyes.
    The messy jungle is divided with fire and warmth.
    The unorganized clutter lives deep within her soul.

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  13. Conflicted again, he awakens.
    Stuck inside a trapped mind, tied to the twin.
    Confusion abounds in the tangle of selves.
    Animosity flows, each identity still ensnared.
    Trying to seize control, the dichotomy creates a rift.
    The battle begins.

    In the struggle, he fights to escape, to leave behind these duplicitous ways.
    With difficulty, he begins to feel the schizophrenia depart, yet he remains bound.

    Blake - Scanner Photo

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  14. @cala
    I really like the line "the spy knows the secrets of its sterile economy".

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  15. Image-Rachel Collins Outlined Human Figure Light Graffiti

    A startled trapped outline engulfed the dark night
    Lost fear shocked and alarmed the human sensation
    As a scared traced murder sat upright in the wet flow of the black sky

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  16. A Poem about Rachel Collin's light graffiti person:

    The zombiesque superhuman wandered through the darkness.
    His disjointed appendages reverberated with every step.
    Is it alien or human? Perhaps an astronaut?
    His pink vibrant outline looked scared yet lonely.
    Panic spread through the pitch black space.
    Startling.
    Shaky.
    Ominous.
    And the faceless figure walked on.

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  17. OH PS. Mines for the Light graffiti in the shower by Cat Byrd

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  18. The zombie-like hand creeps up on me like a nightmare.
    Vibrant red, piercing yellow covers my eyes
    Paranormal, gross, extraterrestrial
    The fingers; long drips of blood hanging from the knuckles.
    Invoking anger, burning my soul.

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  19. 1)white 2)Eager 3)Flowing 4)illuminating 5)Dark
    6)Mysterious 7)shiny 8)Dazzling 9)Cloudy 10)Cluttered 11)noisy 12)happy 13)rapid 14)busy 15)Dynamic 16)bold 17)abundant 18)helpless 19)quiet
    20)good

    Lauryn- Light Graffiti

    The mysterious helpless cloudy figure quietly moved through the dynamic and busy cluttered room. The illuminating dark colors were eagerly shining and rapidly flowing. The room was quiet and filled with a abundant amount of white noise. The colors were bold and dazzling and swallowed the figure whole and it was good.

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  20. The vibrant glowing multicolored light danced around the room
    Fast quick tangled twisted neon moved about

    A Changing rainbow reflecting off the walls
    With a sense of calm and controlled
    yet a surge of chaotic electricity

    The luminous loud figure dancing wiggling in a fun magical way

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  21. Red
    Hostile
    creepy
    grotesque
    elongated
    fiery
    luminous
    deranged
    warped
    alien
    dark
    warm
    unnormal
    ill
    burned
    crazy
    alive
    stretched
    grasping
    fluid

    Barely alive, the elongated stretched hand grasped onto the alien darkness
    The creepy, grotesque fingers glowed red with burning hostile luminosity.
    Its warped fluid movement made it blend well with the deranged environment.
    Although Crazy at it seems, the fiery color gave warmth to the ill treated and unnormal creature.

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  22. The bulk of the ominous figure hunched menacingly.
    It's stance defined only by the vivid pink line that was its silhouette.
    That neon glow a bold light in the dark,
    left undefined It's features.
    This monstrous form seemed to search
    with hands reaching heavily in the black.
    Sharing its restlessness with the world
    the conflicted figure lumbers on.

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  23. Awake from mysterious darkness,
    Massive fluorescent being faces me.
    Colorful glowing, confused but attractive,
    Coming to me, tangled and trapped
    I am getting dazed
    because of its energetic movement
    Is it reflection of mine?
    Or is it just light itself?
    Beautiful spectral dream dances front of me.

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  24. The disjointed and glowing pink mass maneuvers his way through the deep and dark woods. The approaching bulky giant is lonely, ghostly, and rapidly eroding. He travels, glowing palely and silently plunders through the ominous, foreboding abyss. His dismal fate is still unknown to him, yet he curiously stumbles on in the indefinite silence towards his perilous fate.

    (Rachel Collins's light graffiti)

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